Show, Don’t Tell
- I feel hungry: My stomach acid was boiling in my pancake of a digestive system as my joints became frail from fatigue. The low rumble of my brooding stomach echoed from the black gates of Mordor all the way home to Rivendel.
- The zoo was awesome: I stared through the thick glass in horror as the Gorilla squatted down and squeezed a chocolate hot dog into his big muscular hands. My amazement climaxed as the gorilla hobbled over to the window and proceeded to sink his teeth into the soft, warm feces.
- She hated her big sister so much: She felt the corners of her mouth drop and her brow furrow as she glared into her sisters fat face and imaged sinking her fingernails into those juicy cheeks.
- The hurricane was pretty cool: The intense grey vortex swallowed everything within 50 feet, creating a path of total destruction, while randomly spitting out pieces of flying carnage in all directions.
- The whole class was bored: When Mr. Stearns finally paused during one of his endless lectures, I looked up, praying it was finally over, only to find myself looking straight at my table partner drowning in a puddle of his own drool.
- I drove into a clown on the road: My heart skipped as a round red nose protruded from behind a parked car into the road just ahead of me. My foot jumped from the gas to the break but I realized it was too late as a big red clown shoe came flying over my windshield followed closely by a red curly wig. When my car finally screeched to a stop, my hood was stained with white face paint and blood.
Filed by efsw18 at February 6th, 2009 under Uncategorized
